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An improve in the standard of living in a country often only seems to profit cities rather than rural zone.

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Introduction
A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to profit cities rather than rural zone. In my essay, I will discuss
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 point and its negatives and positives in the paragraphs below.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, in my opinion, an improvement in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities,
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 idea is extremely true, due to the fact that
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a number of people are working in a farmer or other rural areas,
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, the folks do not always get all the benefits they earn.
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, at present, a plethora of people are producing various crops, vegetables and many more,
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, nowadays, cotton growing is immensely developed in many countries. To illustrate, farmers have produced cotton productions,
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, all farmers are not
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 obtaining all the profits from cotton, in light of the fact that
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 the cities are received more than half of the benefit,
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, lifestyle becomes good in a city.
Body paragraph 2
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, in my judgement, the upper position is originated different problems, a case in point, various riots might be the reason for the upper problem in a country. The problem solutions might be,
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, I think urbanites must focus on a rural area.
Conclusion
In conclusion, in my point of view, personally, I believe
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 problem solution must a lot of focus on rural zones, owning to the fact that, I believe
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 position's solution is only the method.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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