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You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college giving your accommodation requirements. You should outline what your room and food needs are and also ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter regarding my accommodation requirements
such
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 as the hostel's room and food prepared in the canteen. My name is Raj Bansal and I recently enrolled in your college for next semester. As I have decided to live at the college's dorm, there are some important points which need to be conveyed beforehand.
Firstly
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, I want to be accommodated in a single bedroom with no roommate as I can only focus on my studies when I am alone. I am aware of the fact that it will cost 400$ more per semester as compared to other rooms as mentioned on the website and I am fine with that.
Secondly
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, I am lactose intolerant and won't be able to consume any dairy-made dishes from the cafeteria. I wanted to know if the lactose-free products and dishes would be available in the mess. If not,
then
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 I have contacted some tiffin service agencies who can deliver tiffin to the dorm's reception every day. Please let me know if these needs can be fulfilled or not so that I can make arrangements in advance. looking forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Raj Bansal

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task achievement
The letter is generally clear but could benefit from a more formal closing. Instead of just 'looking forward to your reply,' consider something like 'I look forward to your prompt response.'
coherence and cohesion
Consider using linking words such as 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'in addition' to improve the logical flow between your ideas.
task achievement
You clearly outlined your accommodation preferences and provided reasons, which is a good practice in formal letters.
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Your letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is important in formal communication.
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