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Using a computer every day can have more negative that positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree?

#computer #effects #children
In today's modern world
computer
 plays an important role in the life of
children
 as they get more and more information by using it. I disagree with the given statement and put forth some reasons
of
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 it in upcoming paragraphs.
Computers
 have more positive effects on
children
 as they will become more creative in doing
things
 by using
computers
 in daily life with new and innovative features in it. They can do their assignments, projects with the help of a
computer
 and achieve good marks in their class. They get technical knowledge and support in their study. The
computer
also
 helps in playing games which sharp our knowledge in
free
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 time. Through ,
computer
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computers
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children
 can do anything like study, entertainment and play. At present,
computers
 are in high demand because due to COVID -19 all schools, colleges are closed and they start teaching online through
computers
 which is only possible if we have
computers
 at home. So, the demand for
computers
 increased in the market and now all the students are completing their studies online by using
computers
.
This
 device has positive effects on
children
 because
this
 is used for good
things
 ,not negative
things
. At some ,point it
also
 affects
children
 negatively like if they use the
computer
 for a long time
then
this
 will affect their eyesight. They will be dependent on
computers
 for all
things
 as they find an easy way of doing
things
. So,
this
 will affect their own creativity and brainstorming capacity to some extent. Conclusion-
Computer
 has more positive effects on
children
 than negative so it is a beneficial device for
children
's to gain more knowledge and create innovative methods of doing
things
 And
also
 have to spend a limited time on it.
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  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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