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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Manufacturing greens,like fruits or vegetables for own citizens, is important to the government,
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 of importing from overseas. In my perspective,it has more advantages than drawbacks. Because,difficult to produce all types of food for the local
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, it will be cheaper and more reliable. Despite getting meals from abroad,every country should originate food themselves. It has several reasons,at the outset,if
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 eat local products,it will be cheaper. Because, getting greens or
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 from nearby farms, shop directors should not pay more for
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delivery.
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,if that
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 or fruit comes from other
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,they should deliver by plane,train or ship and
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 it will be much more expensive.
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, manufacturing candies,fruits or even
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 gives trust to the
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. The reason is that if a person sees one type of food,like candy or apples, he feels reliability to the product and he can buy it without any questions or worries.
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,if he wants to buy foreign
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 or bananas,he cannot realise the steps of production and
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, he feels worrying. For the mentioned reasons,
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 manufacturing in the inside of the country has several outweighs.
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, any country can produce all types of meals.Because,wheater conditions,geographical location,budget or other things can create problems to produce.
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, wheater is an important step,when
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 want to grow.
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, growing wheat needs hot weather,but
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, located in the north cannot afford it.
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,some
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 cannot grow
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 their location. Because,all products cannot originate in one location,like a mountains or seas.
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,many European
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 cannot be fishing from the ocean and Arabic
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 are not able to grow vegetables,because of their soil. In conclusion,
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 it may seem unbelievable,
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 should produce
meat
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,vegetables,fruits and others for
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,who live there.

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coherence cohesion
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