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The development of tourism contributed to English, becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

English is the leading
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 in the world
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 the expansion of the tourism industry.
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 some individuals, English will become the global
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 that all countries speak. I believe that the benefits of speaking only
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language
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 outweigh the drawbacks. Having English as the
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 global
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 spoken has valuable gains,
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 as nations can communicate with only
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 unit of speech, which aids them to understand different cultures and makes them collaborate more easily with each other. Another point to consider is that speaking
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language
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 will be helpful for economic growth
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 governments can build more relationships mutually by expressing and interacting in
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language
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, which is beneficial for trade goods and travel from
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 country to another.
On the other hand
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, speaking
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 global
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 in all different countries would affect their own culture. Every nation has its own
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, and they
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 consider that their
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 is the identity of their nation and culture.
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, there is another drawback
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 change. The community may lose their sense of speaking. They learn their
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 since they are kids, and they learn to use it to describe their emotions and opinions. So replacing it with another
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 may be hard for a lot of people. In conclusion, I believe that the profit of having solo expression outweighs the downsides, as the population can deliver their opinions and expressions clearly to the whole world. It not only helps in communicating with people in different cultures, but
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 boosts the economy of all countries.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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