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Some people think that media should not report detail of crimes to the public. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The development of digital
information
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 technology has been creating opportunities for the convenience of spreading
information
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. Conventional press now transforms into the digital press, they may give
information
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 to the public more massively and quickly. While
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 development is considered to bring good effect for
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 transparency, others believe that not every
information
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 should be published by the media
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 detailed
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 about crimes. In my opinion, I agree that the media should limit the
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 about a
crime
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, detailed
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 about
crime
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 action will give an impact on the victims. They may have trauma when they remember the violence they have in the past.
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, criminals on sex rape should not be explained in detail when it is released on media, there is no need explanation step by step how
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 criminal action was taken.
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, an explanation about detailed methods of
crime
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 will
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 inspire others to do
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crime
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. When a robber was caught up by the police and the method that the robber used was explained, it will inspire others to do another alternative method which has more probability to be caught up by the police. The press should only report that there was a
crime
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 because the public just needs that kind of
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, and the detailed
information
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 should only become notes for the police. In conclusion,
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 the development of
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 technology is good for
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 transparency, in some ways it can bring negative effects. The detailed report about crimes can bring trauma to the victims in the future,
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, it
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crime
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, limiting the
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 about a
crime
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 is essential.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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