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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas.

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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit
cities
 rather than rural
areas
. In the following years, many became accustomed to living in
cities
.
For example
, the level of urbanization is very high in all modern countries of the world. In Japan,
for example
, the level of urbanization is 80 %. Of course,
this
also
 has advantages and disadvantages. When urbanization is high, living standards
also
 improve.
This
 is certainly good for living in the city, but we
also
 need to think about the
people
 in the countryside. When living standards improve,
people
 become lazy. Most
people
 in the city do their homework using a variety of techniques, which can lead to a variety of illnesses. The villagers do the housework by hand.
Therefore
, they are healthier than urban residents.
On the other hand
,
people
 in rural
areas
 want to live in
cities
, which is true, but if the lifestyle of
people
 in rural
areas
 improves, they will
also
 live here.
For example
, modern hospitals, schools, gyms and various modern buildings were built in the villages, the living standards of the villagers would
also
 improve. In conclusion, the higher standard of living in the
cities
 has negative effects on the small
areas
, so it seems to be that many solutions of the Government to resolve these situations.
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