Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some
people
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argue that purchasing anything online has become popular nowadays. While there are some negative consequences of
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behaviour, I would argue that its benefits outweigh the drawbacks regarding
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competition and encourage small-medium enterprises.
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of all, buying things on the internet will promote
consumerism
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behaviour.
People
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will get anything that they want impulsively,
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what they bought is not necessary.
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, it has been proved by research that almost 80 per cent of
stuff
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that was bought on the internet have been dumped. Another drawback is that
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particular habit will make
people
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not save their money for their future. They will waste their money because they can shop online and not allocate their money for making an investment for their future Meanwhile,
online
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marketplace has boosted
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the revenue of small-medium enterprises.
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development has already opened the access to
people
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for selling many things, and it will be bought by customers easily.
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,
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the online marketplace has made the
price
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competetion
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competition
between sellers become rigorous.
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, it will benefit the customer because they have access to compare prices of stuff between one
sellers
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on the internet.
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, sellers will compete for their stuff's
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, so that customers will be interested in buying their goods. In conclusion,
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there are some negative impacts of purchasing online,
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as impulsive purchasing and promoting
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lifestyle, it is outweighed by the benefits, particularly in increasing revenue of the SMEs and making the
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competition to be more competitive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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