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the the number of three various fast food consumed by. Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.

The given line graph illustrates the number of three various fast food consumed by. Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000. Overall. There was an increase in the
consumption
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 of hamburgers and pizza,while that of fish and chips went down. Hamburger was the standout fast food consumed, managing to achieve continuous growth for the years recorded. The
consumption
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numbers
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 rose dramatically, with approximately four
times
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 as many consumptions in 2000, compared to the number in 1975.
This
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 is in stark contrast with the case of fish and chips. At
first
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, the figure for
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 dropped slightly;
however
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,following 1980 the consume
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 increase minimally, searching of just under 100
times
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 eaten per year. From that point onward, there was a steep decline in the amount of
consumption
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,with a low point of just under 40
times
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 eaten per year in 2000.
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, the pizza consumed showed a strong increase in
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 from 1975 until 1995, a levelling off of the
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 took place after 1995, with the
consumption
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 at just over 80
times
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 eaten per year

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