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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The advancement in technology has simplified
people
's lives today. Human beings have access to purchase
stuff
 online and it is increasingly becoming common.
This
 essay will explain why the
positive
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positives
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 outweigh the drawbacks Buying
stuff
 online is very convenient as it helps
people
 save time.
For example
,there is a website called Z library which has
a
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apply
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different
books
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book
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.
This
 website has a button for searching and a person can search for a book he/she wants without wasting time
this
 is not only helpful
therefore
 it is
also
 interesting .
purchase
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purchasing
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 a book online is considered to be very effective. Purchasing
stuff
 online is very useful as it
help
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helps
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 save money that could have been used as transport money.
For example
,there is an Online marketing store called eBay, a total of
stuff
 are sold even from different countries and can be bought at once by adding the goods
in
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to
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 a cart.
This
 is less expensive because you can find different
stuff
on
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in
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 one online store or even different stores without moving about.
On the other hand
, Buying
stuff
 online may have a disadvantage,
people
 are swindled by the sellers.Go illustrates, some sellers online tend to advertise fake products and once the retailer sends the money, they deactivate their account,
this
 is very demotivating for
people
 who wish to buy goods online as they may be at risk because of cyber theft. In conclusion,Buying good online have a figure of advantages than disadvantages.
This
 is because it is very convenient and less expensive
therefore
 they may be at risk of
cyber crimes
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cybercrimes
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 like theft.
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