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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.  What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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The diagram illustrates data about the
rainfall
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 rates and
temperatures
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 of a certain city in one year. Overall, the lowest
rainfall
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 was received in December while the highest was in July.
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, the highest
temperatures
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 were experienced in May and the lowest in January. In the
first
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 5
months
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, the city saw a gradual increase in
rainfall
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. It doubled twice from 25mm in February to 50
mm
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 in April, it
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 doubled again from 50mm in April to 100mm in May. From there it skyrocketed to 250mm in June and continued rising and reached its peak in July just below 350mm. Between August and ,December the
rainfall
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 became to plummet with the significant drop experienced in October and November and the lowest being in December. The
temperatures
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 ,
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, rose as the precipitation rose in the
first
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 5
months
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 reaching its highest in the 5th month. From there, a steady drop was seen in the following 3
months
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then
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 they remained stagnant between August and September at about 27 degrees. In the
last
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 4
months
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, the
temperatures
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 began to drop again until they reached approximately 20 degrees at the end of the year. Between July and August, the
rainfall
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 overtook the
temperatures
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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