Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although

it is thought unjustified by some people that a famous sportsman/woman receives much more money through great deals than other essential professions. While others consider that reasonable and fair. I believe that individuals deserve payments commensurate with their duties. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that

sports

professionals having achieved fame, wealth, or social status is unfair.

Therefore

, individuals might believe that there are other professions that deserve

this

care and that amount of wealth more.

For instance

, researchers, scientists, and doctors

who

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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take big responsibilities and save lives.

Furthermore

, society does not seem to value these professions as highly as a professional sport.

On the other hand

, it is fair that the best professionals get paid a lot due to some reason. One major reason is that

sports

stars have dedicated hours of practice to develop their fitness and skills.

Hence

, they don't live a normal life,

for example

, they have to follow a certain dietary plan.

In addition

, only the most talented among them will reach the top.

Thus

, the amount of money is only a small part of a far bigger picture. Despite the fact that an athlete's career may

last

only 10 years. Another point to consider is that there is a large audience of

sports

fans plus,

sports

on television attract many viewers and fans are willing to pay to support their teams.

Consequently

, sport is a multi-million-pound industry. In conclusion, it is considered by some that they achieving too much income

however

, professionals who earn a great deal of money are hard workers in their respective fields.

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13Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

266 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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financial remuneration
exceptional
merit
talent
demand
entertainment value
career span
physical demands
justified
unfair
criticism
income inequality
societal priorities
sportsmanship

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