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Some people say that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

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Communication has become easier and more convenient
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 of mobile
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However
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, some humans argue that cell
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 should not be allowed to be used in public areas
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 as libraries, stores, and public transportation. From my point of view, I totally agree with
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 view.
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 with,
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 can be annoying in spaces where
people
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 are expected to be entirely silent and focused,
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 as libraries and museums. Consider how a group of
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 in a community would use a
phone
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 to communicate with others. They are likely to make a lot of noise. Because cell
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 conversations are only heard over the
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 speaker, you must speak loudly in order for your acquaintance or friends to hear what you're talking about. As a consequence, it will work as a distraction to somebody else, it
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 can impact their work.
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: in my old school library, pupils or tutors can get an easy to take their telephones in.
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, mobile
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 can make users ignore everything around them and be able to cause any accidents.
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 that, they will not pay attention to
people
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 around them if they are in the case of traffic incidents, it might have a negative result of using
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.
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, it is quite unsafe for surrounders when
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 users since interrupted crashes will happen. An example is two days ago, I saw a man who was just looking on his
phone
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 when he crossed the street with his carelessness and one car ran near the man suddenly but luckily he realized and he was still saved. In conclusion, I am really convinced that mobile
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 should be prohibited in public zones.
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, it is very annoying for
people
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 around.
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,
this
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 is maybe caused by any harmful consequences in public transport.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Etiquette
  • Tranquility
  • Prohibit
  • Intrusive
  • Courtesy
  • Essential communication
  • Public decorum
  • Designated areas
  • Safety concerns
  • Noise pollution
  • Digital etiquette
  • Enforcement measures
  • Civic responsibility
  • Silent mode
  • Connectivity
  • Invasiveness
  • Social norms
  • Policy implementation
  • Moderation
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