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Some parents spent little free time with their children today. Why is this? Who do you think it affects more, parents or children?

#parents #time #children
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Nowadays, with the advancement of the societies
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 are equipped our life with new facilities that help human beings to have a comfortable life.
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, some
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 do not consider enough
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 for their
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 because of many reasons. In
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 essay, I will mention some reasons and their consequences
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 conclude. Some
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 think their main responsibility is to gain money and provide for their
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's needs. They try a lot even sometimes do not have any
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 to rest. They believe that their
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 should be appreciative of them their hard work.another reason is, in recent decades because of, downturn, growing population, reduction of income and inflation. More families have to work more
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 to provide for their needs.
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, they have less
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 for themselves and their family. These cases will cause harm to the family. On one side,
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 due to the do not have enough
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 for themselves are nervous
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 always are stressed about their
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.
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, a mother who does not have
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 to cook delicious food for their
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 always is worried about the health of her kids.
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,
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 are more harmed, since, they should learn lifestyle from their
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, they should be supervised and guided by
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 for raising as well as their education.
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, most of the
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 whose
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 are employees or are not at home for a long
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 are nervous and always are alone at home even in school
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 some of them may choose uneven friends to fill their loneliness. In conclusion, as far as I know, the goodly relationship between
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 and their
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 consider enough
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 with together is useful for all of the families member.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Parental involvement
  • Work-life balance
  • Screen time
  • Societal norms
  • Neglect
  • Guilt
  • Milestones
  • Family bonding
  • Quality time
  • Effective parenting
  • Familial connections
  • Dedicated family time
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