Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime

Crime
becomes visible to be increasing in most nations on the earth, particularly among young
people
. I believe there are a couple of main problems, but
also
the number of remedies we could take. Perhaps the worst problem is
rising
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of social media content use
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teenagers. Almost all kind of social content includes
crime
-related parts in it.
For example
, Movies and video clips show that once in a life, shoplifting, fighting, breaking rules, or selling drugs is fine and anyone could do that. A
further
problem is most parents are parenting with carelessness to their kids. Every single step that fathers or mothers, even grandparents take
is
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will be copied
in
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their kids’ future life. There is research from the UK federal
crime
center
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that says over 70% of the young
people
affected by
crime
are from poor moral families. Turning to possible solutions, if governments started limiting the
crime
scene contents or
crime associated
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parts on social media, it would not inspire young
aged
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citizens to try some illegal doing. The
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further
step would be focusing on families growing society, especially for low-income
people
. Some article says that the second generation of unemployed children has a high chance to
involve
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in
crime
. The governments, TVs, parents, and Teachers need to entertain and advertise how important it is that talk with kids often and explain to kids what is right and what is wrong.
Overall
, the problems are in conjunction with how adults care, in government's decisions and parents' method of upbringing, and
solution
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will require more attention
on
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society
of
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by
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young
people
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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