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Some people think that media have the right to publish details of people's private lives, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

#people #media #right #lives
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Media
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 plays an important role in an individual's
life
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,due to the fact that it can either destroy,influence or make you. I would say that they do not have the right to publish people's private
lives
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. Some people do not want their
lives
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 displayed on the
media
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 ,so
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 always appropriate to seek permission from the
client
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 before posting their
lives
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 out there on
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 feel that it can be controlled by ensuring that they are permitted to post only what they are being instructed to.While some of them
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 to your instructions ,others don't.
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, you can always have a discussion with them ;letting them know your stand in regards to your private
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 being published on
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. You could explain to them
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the mishaps it could create in your everyday
life
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. Of note,you could get a lawyer involved if they would not listen to your instructions . In conclusion, the world is a global village and the
media
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 has to agree to the
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's terms and conditions regarding their private
lives
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 published out there and publish only that which is needed regarding the
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's
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 and by so doing, help in promoting the career and everyday
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 of the
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