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Rising university fees as a result students prefer practical degree courses. Agree or disagree?

#university #fees #students #courses
It is often said that nowadays about the role of the university in society for pupils and different useful
courses
. A lot of students after finishing
their
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high school want to study in an important educational organization. From my point of view, students should to choice
interesting
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 educational
future
 for themselves. I partly agree with
this
 point and explain the reasons for
this
 in the below essay.
To begin
 with, today's
universities
are much prefer
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option
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 for boys and girls. There is no denying that most of
them
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the
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 parents do not
choice
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a
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different small practical degree
courses
 for their children, they prefer
a
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big and famous
universities
 or colleges.
For example
, if
this
 child lived in
parents'
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their parents'
his parents'
her parents'
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 house, he should respect
mothers'
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his mothers'
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 and fathers'
prefer
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. We all know
a
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young people, most of them in eighteen ages do not know
that
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what
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 they will do in
future
.
Therefore
, in
modern
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 world,
reputation
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the reputation
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 of
university
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the university
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 in
future
 students' eyes is very strong and clear, just because pupils prefer university
than
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courses
.
In contrast
 to the above point, practical
courses
 are cheaper than
universities
' programs.
For instance
, more poor people can not
to
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study in expensive faculties,
however
, they need to get professional skills and knowledge for their
future
 and economy independent. Practical degree
courses
 are perfect options for these people.
In addition
,
courses
 required
a
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fewer hours for getting a specialisation, skills and diploma than
universities
' programs. In conclusion, I partly agree with
this
 idea. In my opinion,
universities
more
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are more
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 popular than practical
courses
, but these
courses
 a cheaper and required
less
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fewer
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 hours for getting professional skills and
diploma
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diplomas
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.
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