Children in many countries are eating more fast food and convenience snacks. Why are children doing this and hoxw serious are the consequences?

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In recent times, the amount of junk
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that young people eat has increased in many countries.
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the reason for
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why
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significant issue for
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. In modern times, parents use most of their
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working, sleeping or commuting.
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why there is a need of doing the housework in the shortest
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possible, and one way of achieving
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is buying fast
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and convenience snacks because it is fast and relatively cheap.
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, TV and internet advertising of junk
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is targeted to
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so that they ask their parents to buy it. An example of
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is a website of a cookie company that has advertisements disguised as videogames in order to make
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remember their product and crave it. The main problem with
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behaviour is that it damages
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's health.
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will have future negative effects beyond health
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as poor academic
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performance
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,
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will bring adverse consequences to
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society in the long term because it will reduce productivity
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because an unhealthy worker is less productive. To prove
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assertion is very simple: Countries like Japan with
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very reduced fast
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consumption have much higher productivity than those where junk
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is ubiquitous. to sum up, these new alimentary habits caused by the lack of
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of modern
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families and fast
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and snacks advertising will have negative consequences not only to
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's health but
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to their academic performance and, in the long term even to the countries productivity.
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