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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many today believe that learning in groups, in
classrooms
, has more advantages for
students
 than studying remotely. I completely agree with
this
 sentiment, as studying in
classrooms
, surrounded by
students
 of similar ages and goals, helps to nurture important communication
skills
 among
students
 and
also
 helps teachers pay more attention to their
students
. Good communication and problem-solving
skills
 are an undeniable asset in today's competitive world. The way an individual communicates can be the determining factor between someone securing a well-paid job and someone struggling to find employment.
Therefore
,
such
skills
 should be fostered in
students
 from an early age. One way to do
this
 is to promote in-person studying.
Students
 in
classrooms
 are granted the chance to build strong friendships and navigate and solve conflicts with and among their peers and in the process strengthen their interpersonal
skills
. these
skills
 can
then
 be carried into their adult lives, helping them pilot through complex work relationships,
such
 as the relationship between work colleagues and employ-employer relationships.
Moreover
, group classroom studying provides teachers
to have
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 a clear view of all the
students
 in their classroom. Online teaching is largely done through video-calling platforms
such
 as Zoom, these platforms do not give the educator a clear overview of the participants of their classes.
This
 adversely impacts an educator's teaching, as expressions and body language can go unnoticed, making them unaware of when concepts need re-explaining. In-person
classrooms
, where all
students
 are in the teacher's field of vision, is a simple solution to
this
 problem. All things summed up, there are many advantages of studying in
classrooms
, among
students
, these
classrooms
 provide a way for
students
 to develop important social
skills
 and among educators, it helps them by giving them access to their student's non-verbal cues.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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