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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books
Over a few decades, internet evolvement and digitalisation allow everyone to read everything online freely
that
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 may drive people to abandon paper-based
newspapers
 and
books
. I do believe that
this
 circumstance is
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 to happen in the future due to online-information abundance and people’s awareness
towards
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environment
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. The very
first
 reason why human being prefers reading online
literatures
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literature
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 to paper-based information is the abundance of online sources that
allows
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 people to easily access and read them even for free. The major factor making
this
 happen is the
internet
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rapid-development
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. Following
to
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that, social media’s massive growth supports the availability of the latest information.
This
 is definitely advantageous for mankind to save their money from newspaper monthly
subscription
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.
Furthermore
, soft-file
books
 are much easier to store. We don’t need to provide a spacious room for building a library.
This
 makes paper-based
literatures
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 become
something
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obsolete to
human’s
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 eyes. Another reason that shifts
human’s
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 reading behaviour to internet-based is the significant rise of people’s awareness towards
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. Go-green habit (movement), particularly paperless preference, has been driving mankind’s thought to reduce or even to avoid paper use by massive campaigns. The thing is the more people read
newspapers
 and
books
; the more trees that are cut down. By not reading conventional
newspapers
 and
books
, it means that we have participated to combat
the
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excessive paper use. In a nutshell, I believe that the paperless trend will drive people’s preference to read internet-based
literatures
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 (i.e.:
newspapers
 and
books
) in the future.
This
 trend is
most-likely
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 unstoppable
amidst
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 world citizens.
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