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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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It is gradually higher the fact that various students prefer to study in other
countries
.
This
 is because developed nations are offering more and better job opportunities to the juveniles in our society. I think
this
 is a big benefit for the students, especially when they come from a poorer community with a lack of
job
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 and new opportunities whereas it is a disadvantage for the original country which suffer from the loss of young workforce in their nations.
To begin
 with, many students find better opportunities and higher salaries in the same profession than in their state. For ,instance a doctor who lives in the UK will have a triple salary than a doctor in South America.
Therefore
 it is not hard to understand why the
people
 are trying to improve their lives, with the consequences that these change.
However
,
this
 is very bad publicity for the
people
 in their original
countries
. Every year more
people
 are immigrating from their
countries
 to the developed
countries
, looking for a change in their quality of life.
For instance
 in Argentina in 2018 before the pandemic started 10 million citizens between 20 and 45 years old leave the country to find a better life abroad. So a big number of citizens are travelling to search better future for themselves and their families. To sum ,up there are numerous young
people
 which take the option to travel to different
countries
 and find better work alternatives than in their native soil and
this
 is even more often when the county does not count with a good financial status and in , the fact they can not offer new positions.
This
 will increase year by year if the land in crisis doesn't get better financial status.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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