Some people think that government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployees or the homeless. Do you agree or disagree

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A certain number of people believes disadvantaged

citizen's

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citizens'

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care

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government's

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the government's

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responsibility but others believe that they should

care

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for

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themselves. In

this

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essay I will elaborate why I am

completly

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completely

agrees with higher authority should take

care

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underprivilaged

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underprivileged

people. To commence with, it is very appreciatable discission that

government

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is taking

care

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for poor and backward

religous

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religious

communities by giving

stipent

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stipend

for elderly ,

scholership

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scholarship

scholarships

for students, and house for homeless.

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the India

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India

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Indian

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government

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is providing home for below poverty line citizens.

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to that free education for SCST group and so many

scholership

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scholarship

scholarships

for raising that community.

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support

fron

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from

the

authories

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authorises

gave them

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the

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mental strength to face their disabilities.

Addition

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to that,

Goverment

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Government

can provide monthly cereals and grains and some groceries to

poor

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the poor

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to vomit poverty. Mentally and physically disabled citizens

maynot

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may not

able

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be able

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to find

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a job

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job

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jobs

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to feed themselves. so the ration will be

great

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a great

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relief for them.

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, Researches find that with the help of

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government

goverment

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the goverment

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kerala

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become

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becomes

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100

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a 100

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percent

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per cent

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poverty free

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poverty-free

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state. To conclude, education, food and shelter are three basic

necessity

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necessities

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for a person. With the

Government

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support

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disadvantaged persons can

led

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lead

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there life

stress free

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stress-free

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and I strongly support for

this

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discission

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Summary
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

202 words

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Some people think that government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployees or the homeless. Do you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

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