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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals, Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is no argument that there are a lot of environmental
problems
in
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these days. One of the environmental issues is the extinction of various
creatures
 that everyone should realize
this
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this problem
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problems
firstly
. In fact, there are
also
 other environmental
problems
,
in particular
, which is
effect
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from
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humans
such
 as deforestation.In
tge
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the
 following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. It is true to explain that plants and
animals
 in the world are important and related to the
environment
 because if the world has
not
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environment
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the environment
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, the
creatures
 will
be not exist
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 and if there are
not
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no
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creatures
such
 as plants or
animals
, the ecosystem in
environment
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 cannot be balanced. In the other words, the
environment
 and
creatures
 are one. For
the
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example,
the
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wild
animals
 are in the forest and, the fish are in the water,
moreover
,
humans
 need to take
advantag
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advantage
advantages
 of
creatures
 and
environment
 as consumptions, we need to angle for eating food.
However
, there
are
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also
 other important
problem
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problems
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about
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environment
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. I think it is probably a human-made
environment
problem
such
 as the
problem
 of toxic gas emitted from the
factorie
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factories
factory
 of the manufacturing industry.
This
problem
 is very serious and
humans
 should be careful because toxic gases can cause wide-ranging harm to the
environment
,
such
 as
creatures
 in water will die,
humans
' lungs will be destroyed, and there are more toxic wastes that can affect
to
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the world.
That is
 global warming. In conclusion, the loss of particular species of plants and
animals
 is the main environmental
problem
 because the
creatures
 and
environment
 are one.
However
, the other
problems
 are
also
 important too.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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