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Some people think that technology makes life complex, so we should make our life simpler without using technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 modern era,
technology
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 plays a huge role.Some people do not believe that because they believe that makes
life
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 harder.I totally disagree with the statement,
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 I have a plethora of examples to prove that.
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, people use
technology
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 for their every single work what they do in every day.
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, when they start to build a house for them, they need to use machines which comes from
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. Without using machines it takes huge time for the construction.
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technology
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 updates every day, sometimes tomorrow is really easier than today.
On the other hand
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, We use modern inventions for our agricultural projects.
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, Advancement of genetic engineering we make more economical and eco-friendly foods for us and
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 very important for our society because, with the rapid increase of people, we are all in a huge challenge
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 as lack of food so, that advancement is the best solution only we have and it's work. we produce a lot of foods nowadays.
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, the development of the transportation section makes human
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 more convenient. At the present, We can save a lot of time with that because
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 very easier than in past with the modern methods. We can travel in a plethora of things
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 as aeroplanes, trains, buses, cars etc ,
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However
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 with these things,
life
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 is so easier. In conclusion, modern methods which come from
technology
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 make
life
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 mo convenient and with that, we can decrease our problems.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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