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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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Childhood is the best era for changing their mind towards the betterment of the
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, in some traditions, kids are often told that they are able to
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 at anything if they have enough dedication.
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 pros and cons of giving
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 belief will create a more educated
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future
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 will create in the
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 mind. Due to that, they will study hard and become
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recent research has found that 85% of top positioned persons in Sri Lankan Medical services had
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 in their
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 ambition which was
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a doctor.
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, kids who have targets to explore new things are
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 someone may have to be
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, those uncontrollable youth will do mal-functions in
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the field when he was at 10
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 of age.
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, a higher competition to
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 among the pupils and it will cause to reduce
humanity
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 a selfish person would create when they are growing older. To conclude, by teaching to
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 at anything for the youth
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 which depicts many gains and losses in
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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