In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Childhood is the best era for changing their mind towards the betterment of the
future
. Hence
, in some traditions, kids are often told that they are able to success
at anything if they have enough dedication. Replace the word
succeed
This
essay will be elaborated the
pros and cons of giving Change preposition
on the
this
idea to youngsters.
To begin
with, above
belief will create a more educated Correct article usage
the above
society
in future
. As, the improvement of morals, which is required to gain a higher position in future
will create in the toddlers
mind. Due to that, they will study hard and become Change to a genitive case
toddler's
toddlers'
most
valuable individuals in Correct article usage
the most
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
one day. For instance
, by
Change preposition
apply
a
recent research has found that 85% of top positioned persons in Sri Lankan Medical services had Remove the article
apply
succeed
in their Change the verb form
succeeded
younger aged
ambition which was Add a hyphen
younger-aged
become
Fix the infinitive
to become
as
a doctor. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, kids who have targets to explore new things are also
engaged in innovations and they may contribute to the well-being of the
Correct article usage
apply
society
.
Despite above
, the drawbacks are Correct article usage
the above
also
there. Since,
someone may have to beRemove the comma
apply
a
top position in Change preposition
in a
in
notorious action Remove the redundancy
apply
as a result
of the environment where they lived. Hence
, those uncontrollable youth will do mal-functions in future
. To illustrate, a recently dead person who was known as the king among drug dealers had entered to
the field when he was at 10 Change preposition
apply
year
of age. Change to a plural noun
years
Moreover
, a higher competition to be arisen
among the pupils and it will cause to reduce Change to the active voice
arise
have arisen
humanity
of them. Add an article
the humanity
Similarly
a selfish person would create when they are growing older.
To conclude, by teaching to Add a comma
,Similarly
success
at anything for the youth Replace the word
succeed
society
which depicts many gains and losses in future
society
as a result
of this
and by considering all the facts together, it has proven in this
essay.Submitted by nadee124 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...