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Some students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In
this
 contemporary world, youngsters are willing to
experience
 an adventurous life apart from high
school
 studies.Some
students
 prefer to travel and work for some time after completing schooling
instead
 of applying to the university directly.
while
 there are many benefits of
this
such
 as exposure to the real world and
their
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 is an increase in
professional
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the professional
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network
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 there certain drawbacks too.The following paragraphs
would
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 elucidate
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages with examples. To commence with first and foremost the major advantage of working after schooling is gaining hands-on
experience
.
This
 is certainly important because few skills can be learnt only through practical
experience
.Another great advantage is they will get the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to meet the senior management of the company.
This
 will have
great
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affect
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 on freshers as they learn
trade
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the trade
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 from experts and will have
referal
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referral
 down the line.
For instance
, I secured my job in advertising
by
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 a
referal
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referral
 from
manager
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a manager
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where
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 I worked as an intern under him.
This
 will be
fruitful
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experience
 to earn money after a long run in
school
. On
other
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 hand, we cannot undermine the disadvantages over the advantages.There are obvious drawbacks running
of
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 rushing directly to work after
school
.
Firstly
, most of the jobs available in the market for young
pass outs
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 are the
odd-jobs
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odd jobs
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 which will not add any value to the resume. Jobs like
baby sitter
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babysitter
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 will give personal
experience
however
 it will not give any benefit for
applying
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 corporate jobs.
Secondly
, money will deviate the
students
 from planning their future studies and focus on continuing their earnings.
For example
, I have a friend who started working after schooling as earning is satisfying all his needs so he is not planning to study
further
. To summarize, attending university after finishing
school
 not be preferred by
students
 as they decide to gain some
experience
 by working.
Although
students
 will get exposed to
real
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 world and gain positive
experience
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experiences
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 they may choose the wrong path and
low
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apply
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focus on
the
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carrier
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careers
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.
Therefore
 selecting the right
carrier
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career
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 path should be
priority
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a priority
the priority
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.
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