Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is

celar

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clear

that modern people have been suffered from many diseases

as a result

from

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taking too much

sweat

food. Many doctors asserted to

raising

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the

prices

of sugary food because eating lots of

sugar

can cause various health problems.

However

, I disagree medical field's

opnion

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opinion

option

for many reasons.

Government

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The government

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has tried to find

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apply

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ways to restrict

consumption

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the consumption

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of high levels of

sugar

in

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apply

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nowadays. One of the discussed ways is to enhance the

prices

of

sweat

commodities.

On the other hand

,

this

regulation can have impacts on society not in a good way.

Firstly

, making

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sugary products expensively can intensify the gap between the poor and the rich. Even though the government introduces the law, which is restricting high

sugar

consumption, the rich can buy and consume the sweaty without a burden

unlike

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poor people.

Therefore

, simply raising

prices

of its is just widened

tha

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the

that

gap and it may induce lower self-esteem

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low income

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workers.

Also

,

this

limitation can make people

to

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get more

stress

than now. One of the prevalent ways to solve

stress

is eating high-

sugar

.

For example

, most of my friends have released their

stress

caused by excessive study and getting a job to go to

cafe

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a cafe

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where

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that

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is filled with

sweat

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sweet

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desserts. Many have used

this

method to control their negative feelings.

Thus

, if government restrains eating

sweat

foods used by

economical

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the economical

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method, it can cause more

disease

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diseases

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related to the high-level

stress

. In conclusion, I object to

make

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the

prices

of high-level

sugar

food

to

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too

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expensive. Since

,

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to

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restricting the consumption to use unwelcoming way can induce the negative results

such

as

heightend

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heightened

unfair gap and even it may result in getting more

stress

.