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some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold weather.others prefer a hot enviornment.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nature has created the planet earth in
such
 a way that one can find diversity in almost everything.
Similarly
 , human behaviour is
also
 different from one another.
Therefore
,some like to enjoy the activities and lifestyle that hot
weather
 offers whereas others prefer cold
weather
 conditions.
However
 ,I like the environment which lies in between cold and hot
weather
that is
 spring due to soothing
weather
 conditions and greenery. It has been seen that,generally,humans like things that are away from them and are not part of their daily routine. For an instance, most Canadians love beaches ,but Canada remains covered with snow most of the time in a year,
therefore
 the Canadians plan their vacation to warm
weather
 countries like Mexico. Because there they can take sunbathe and enjoy swimming as well as their style of living whenever they want which is not possible in Canada.
Similarly
, most people who live in comparatively warm areas wish to visit cold places or countries.To illustrate, the south Indian population desire to explore cold areas to enjoy the snow , food and lifestyle of that places because in south India atmospheric temperature lies between 15-degree Celcius to 30-degree Celcius throughout the year.
Hence
 they visit places like Shimla, Leh, Ladakh etc where the
weather
 is comparatively cold. In conclusion, human get attracted to
the
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thing
that is
 far away from them due to curiosity. Because he is curious about it and wants to explore it. In my view, the spring season is the best of all because in
this
weather
 one can experience and enjoy the beauty of nature to its fullest.
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