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wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Each animal
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 a vital role in our ecosystem.
However
, in the present, it is argued that they do not belong in our advanced world and protecting them is just a wastage of funds. I firmly disagree with the above statement and will explain why we should make an effort to protect them.
First
 of all, saving
animals
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 not a waste of funds. These creatures are important to keep the balance in our ecosystem, from the biggest to the smallest ones they have their role to
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.
For example
, the bears are responsible for dispersing seeds of berries and other fruits they consume
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 a daily basis, which aid in generating more fruit-bearing plants in the forest. If they will cease to exist,
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 of trees and plants will significantly decline and will cause a negative outcome to humans, resulting
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less
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 food resources.
Thus
, we should not discard them.
Second
, protecting
animals
 is our sole responsibility. No one else would have the ability to do so and we should act before
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 too late. As we know, some of them are already extinct
such
 as the woolly mammoth, which is believed to be
closedly
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closely
 related to a modern-day elephant. If we fail to save them, the future generation will only be seeing these
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 of
animals
 through books and videos. Not only that, their loss will abrupt the natural flow of
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 community of interacting organisms and their environment.
That is
 why we should be aware of our role to save them. In conclusion, despite the argument that saving
animals
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 just a waste of tax money, I firmly believe that it is not true because
failling
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failing
 to do so will lead to
decrease
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a decrease
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of
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 food resources. We should
also
 advocate for their lives. By doing so, we are fulfilling our part to keep the balance in our environment.
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