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people
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percent
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health
and Use synonyms
education
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society positively. Correct article usage
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people
to solve Use synonyms
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cost
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low income
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low-income
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especially
in developing countries. There is a prime example that one Add the comma(s)
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people
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donations
give a chance to the students who Use synonyms
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less affluentAdd a missing verb
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families to get
education
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This
means that many young Linking Words
people
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who
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world’s
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the world’s
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fees
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they have a true passion. So thanks to scholarships donated by warm-hearted Linking Words
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, thousands of offspring can get a qualified Use synonyms
education
all around the world. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, I appreciate that some Linking Words
people
think differently, saying that the majority of Use synonyms
donations
may not Use synonyms
able
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positive
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donations
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such
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health
and Use synonyms
education
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cost
. If everybody Fix the agreement mistake
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