Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children that are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. discuss both views and give your own opinion

There is a heated debate that has sparked all over the world. Some believe that it is important to boost young children a
mind-set
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mindset
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of
tournament
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while it is considered that
co-operation
is more suitable to be taught compared to
competition
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the competition
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because they think it would be a big help to be effective adults. In
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of both ideas and my opinion will be mentioned.
To begin
with, participating in a
competition
is a good thing to do regardless of winning.
People
can get a lot of benefits from a game
such
as a great experience, motivation and
friend
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. What
is
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more, games make the youth more active, fresh and hardworking
.
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In addition
, while preparing for the
competition
, uncountable knowledge about the title or topic can be got.
For example
, participating in
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competition
,
a
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wisdom of the history
such
as what was happening in
respective
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country and how did elder
people
overcame can be noticed.
Nevertheless
, most
people
tend to win the final resulting selfish and making bad things to opponents.
On the other hand
,
co-operation
is
also
an important skill that every young
people
should practise since they were young. There is no doubt that
co-operation
can improve teamwork skills, communicating skills and other required skills in daily life.
Moreover
, at least two
people
have to work together and share their ideas to co-operate.
Therefore
,
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teenager
are
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more likely to respect other
people
's views and they become more patient. Most importantly, if the children have the habit of
co-operation
, they have more chances of getting more opportunities in every
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. To sum up, I more prefer
co-operation
rather than
competition
.
Although
their targets are the same which is winning or finishing the task perfectly,
competition
may bring negative thinking and
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physical
violence.
Hence
, I believe that
advantages
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of
co-operation
outweigh
merits
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the merits
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of
competition
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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