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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other private vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
In modern days
increase
 in automobiles and ,technology causes the rise of
pollution
 and toxic
air
Pollution
 affects the earth and causes global warming .I agree with the solution the best way
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solve the earth's environmental issues is to
increase
 the cost of
fuel
 for cars and other automobiles. In ,addition an
increase
 in the productivity of Electric
vehicles
 is the best way to stop global warming
also
 some other ways to reduce
this
 problem.
First
 and foremost nowadays most
people
 have cars and own
vehicles
 it is good to hike the prices of petrol and diesel so that
people
 can use public transport
instead
 of own
vehicles
.For ,instance if the
government
increase
 the price of fuels so
people
 can use public transport and it leads to a
decrease
 in
air
pollution
 in the
air
.In ,Delhi the
government
 come up with the solution on the weekend
people
 can use only public transport
instead
 of their own
vehicles
. So that the usage of vehicle
decrease
 on particular days these results to
decrease
 the
air
pollution
 .
In addition
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the
government
 and the automobile industry is expanding the productivity of Electric
vehicles
 so that the consumption of gas is decreased .For ,instance if the prices of
fuel
 hike
people
 can look for alternative usage so that if the productivity of EV increases and the cost may be affordable the public can buy electric
vehicles
 .It results in an
increase
 in EVs and a decline in
fuel
vehicles
. In conclusion,the
increase
 in the price of fuels is resulting from the
decrease
 in global warming and
however
, the
government
 can take some steps to
decrease
 global warming like planting trees which lead to a
decrease
 in heat in the environment and
therefore
 they can take C02 and give good
air
.So that not only increases the
fuel
 some measures have to take to improve the earth's atmosphere.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive use
  • encouraging public transportation
  • sustainable energy sources
  • hydrogen-powered vehicles
  • generate additional revenue
  • environmentally friendly projects
  • disproportionately affects
  • lower-income individuals
  • accessible public transportation options
  • sudden hikes
  • inflation
  • social inequality
  • renewable energy
  • promoting carpooling
  • equitable
  • addressing environmental issues
  • punitive measures
  • sustainable lifestyle
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