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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn about current events. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often thought by some
people
 that in order to stay updated for knowing about the current events in the country,
newspapers
 are the optimal medium.
On the contrary
,
other
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 side of
society
believe
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 that
news
 from mediums like social
media
,
radio
 or
television
 is better. While traditional
media
 has its own benefits, I would argue that information from other
media
 is more significant. There are numerous merits of reading using the newspaper for everyday
news
. The
first
 and foremost is that as it comes from a number of verified sources, it is one of the most effective ways of authentic
news
;
on the other hand
,
news
 from social
media
 can be fake
some times
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, resulting in chaos in
the
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society
.
Moreover
, most of the
news
 printed
on
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 these
newspapers
 are always in so much detail, which can dwindle the chances of any ambiguity, whereas
radio
 or
television
 shows generally
telecated
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telecasted
on
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 specific times,
and
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giving
large
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 amount of information in
such
 a short time can be arduous sometimes. Take
for example
of
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‘Pandora Papers’ where the international group of journalists work collaboratively from all across the globe and investigated the case by verifying it genuinely to unmask the hidden owners of secret bank
account
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accounts
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, apartments, private jets to expose them worldwide.
However
, is the are
these
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news
 from
newspapers
 have more benefits overall than other
news
 resources? Certainly not, as the other
news
outlets
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 they have
certain
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 edge over
old
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the old
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 way of
media
 because of the advancement in technology, like
news
 from social
media
 like Facebook or Instagram is free of cost, and it can reach millions of
people
 conveniently and very quickly;
consequently
, it can have more effect on
the
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society
 than the others .
Additionally
, it is reachable to
people
 from all age groups through
radio
 or
television
, while
newspapers
 are mostly used by our parents' generation only, which means the availability of
news
 from
such
 forums is comparatively more rapid and easy to get.
For instance
, as per an article in -'The Times'- 80% of
the
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India's young population prefer to watch
news
 through
online
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medium
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mediums
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 rather than the
newspapers
. To recapitulate,
although
traditional
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 way of
media
 is preferred by a huge number of
people
 from the
society
,
news
 from social
media
,
radio
 or
television
 is much more effective owing to its easy reach.
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