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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
It is argued that migrating to a foreign
language
 may lead to potential problems in terms of social as well as practical. Learning
language
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 is a vital procedure to easily adapt
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 the place that the person is going to permanently stay.
This
 essay agrees that it may cause serious problems because the person without background knowledge of the
language
 can lead
him
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to conflict and
problem
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problems
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to understand
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 a simple manual instruction. There are various ways to learn the
language
 in the nation that people is going to migrate
.
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 Several people without any idea in
language
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they
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tend to go, causing them having difficulty to understand can lead to various adverse
ramification
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ramifications
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.
Furthermore
, coming to
foreign
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language
 country should have a small background of the
language
. A friend of mine is a prime example, he went to a country where he only knows one word, during his work there is
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 fight that leads him to jail.
In addition
, there can
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possibility of
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 to understand a simple task.
Moreover
, while performing the job, having
a
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tiny learning about the simple manual instruction
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 example, can
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effect
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to
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trouble. At least, if the person learned the basic
language
 used there will be an understanding in both
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. For
instances
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, in work, you cannot work properly without any idea about the
language
 they are talking about. In conclusion, I agree that living in a foreign
language
 country without basic knowledge can cause serious trouble because it may lead to miss understanding and potential having
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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