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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely

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It is true that many people believe that, it is better to exchange more data as much as possible in the field of science, trade, and academy. While
this
 may encourage people to acquire more
knowledge
, I believe that important and precious information should not provide free as it will be undermined their effort. In modern days, a vast amount of research articles and papers are published everyday life in various sectors like science, business, academy.
This
 newest
knowledge
 encourages us to learn more and it
also
 helps us to keep us up to date. As an example, we can mention
about
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a medical profession where doctors need to be aware of their latest treatment methods and medicine.
However
, I think all the scientific information are not for the general public so no need to disclose it for all.
On the other hand
, Researchers work hard to investigate new things and publish a new paper or article. Sometimes the cost of an investigation is
also
 huge which is not possible for them to bear and continue their work. As government provide a little amount of money in
this
 field and most of the time scientist need to depend on the private sector and the private sector will only invest money where they get turnover from it. If the
knowledge
 discloses freely they will not able to make money which will undermine their work and they
finally
 abandon
this
 sector.
Therefore
, I think precious information should not provide without any charge. In conclusion, though scientific
knowledge
 encourages us to enrich our learning, I think valuable scientific research should not exchange freely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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