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“Everybody should donate fixed amount of their income to support charity” How far do you share this viewpoint.

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It appears that
people
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 ought to give a specific amount of their
money
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 for
sake
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the sake
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 of
charity
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. Even though most wealthy
people
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 accept that point, personally I disagree
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this
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with this
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 concept.
This
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 essay will discuss 2 reasons why everybody can not donate
for
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to
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charity
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. On the one hand, not everybody should do it as it depends on their willingness and earnings. All
people
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 can not find
job
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a job
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moreover
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, most
people
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 can not earn enough
money
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over
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for
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 their needs.
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example
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 sixty percent of
population
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the population
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 is still poor. Affluent folks all over the world can not pull over their bad situation. Another reason that individuals
not
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do not
did not
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 have to pay
their
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for their
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 willingness
for
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to
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charity
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 is donating does not have a mere definition
to pay
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of paying
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money
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 for vulnerable
people
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; everyone can help as much as they can. It may not even be financial help, but
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 we can donate clothes or items that are no longer used and are not old. Providing that
people
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 help poor
people
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 not only
by
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money
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 once in a
while
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 but would
also
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 be very useful and has no economic pressure on anyone. Some folk has a plan for their expense, and they set aside monthly or weekly
money
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 for
charity
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 work.
But
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it is not practical
according to
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 the current financial challenges encountered all around the world.
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, giving a fixed amount of our income is not feasible for every citizen.
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, it would be possible for everyone to others in different ways as they wish, not just financially, and there should not be any force or
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obligation
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oblige
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 for them to do so.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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