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Write about the following topic: Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Environmental concerns
such
 as air pollution, water pollution, global warming and climate change have
got
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gotten
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 out of hand during the
last
 few years, and people have different views about whether those
problems
 should be solved by authorities or
individuals
. In my opinion, the
government
 and citizens should work together and share the responsibility for protecting the planet. Some people believe that it is the
government
 that has to deal with environmental issues in the country for the simple reason that they have the authority, which
individuals
 do not possess, to impose new laws and hinder people from harming the environment.
For example
, they can collect heavy tax on carbon emissions from mass production factories and industrial waste from corporate companies.
This
 will encourage big businesses to come up with more eco-friendly methods of waste management.
Moreover
, environmental campaigns should be launched by the
government
 to raise public awareness of how current
problems
 could be tackled by organisations and
individuals
.
However
, no matter how much the
government
 forces the citizens to abide by the environmental laws or conduct campaigns to make the public more aware of the global
problems
 which are threatening the existence of living species on earth, it is
individuals
 who decide to cooperate with the
government
 in making a change. Unless they stop throwing rubbish into rivers regardless of the law, it will still be impossible for the
government
 to create a better place for sea creatures.
Thus
,
Individuals
 have to educate themselves on the importance of a balanced ecosystem and understand the consequences of their actions. In conclusion, environmental
problems
 are
such
 urgent issues that both the
government
 and
individuals
 should work together to mitigate them.
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