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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#government #money #railways #roads
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Nowadays, due to the rapid increase in
population
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 the
government
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 is investing
lot
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 of money in railways than
roadways
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. I believe constructing more
railway
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 lines will help many
people
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 to transit in
easiest
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mean
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 without any hassle. So I completely agree with the statement.
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, the railways are always the cheapest mode of transport
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 to others like airways and
roadways
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. Because of one train on
track
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 many
people
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 will get benefited along with the
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.
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, trains can carry many
people
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 with
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an enormous
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 amount of space in it without any congestion like in the bus.
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, trains can pull massive loads which makes
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 profitable and cheapest ways of transport makes
people
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 satisfied.
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 makes
lot
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 of
people
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 make use of the line organized by the
government
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.
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, trains will always arrive on time.
Railway
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system
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systems
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 will not face traffic
problem
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problems
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 like
roadways
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. By commuting on
train
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the train
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 can avoid from getting delayed. But in
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roadways
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,roadways
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 the traffic of the road cannot be predicted. Which makes
people
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to
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apply
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calculate upon their arrival at
destination
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the destination
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 point.
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pick
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 them up from the
railway
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 station.
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,
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railway
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the railway
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 department would announce the timings of arrivals and departure which will be accurate and reliable to the general public. To conclude, always
railway
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 system
have
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 huge plus points comparing to the
roadways
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 so, I would say that always
government
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 should consider spending its money
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 profitable plans.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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