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ou have been invited to attend an interview for a place on a course of study at a college. Unfortunately, because of a previous appointment, you cannot go to the interview at the time they wish. Write a letter to the admissions tutor. In your letter explain why you cannot keep the appointment apologise and offer to arrange a new appointment ask how long the interview will be, and whether there will be any tests during it You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 email finds you in good health and you are doing well. I am writing
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 email to inform you of some concerns about the
interview
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 that I am supposed to attend next
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 as a prerequisite for placement in the Master of Business Administration course at your prominent college in Canada.
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, I am over the moon as I am going to pursue my higher education in your esteemed educational institution and I got the appointment to appear in an
interview
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 in the next
week
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, particularly the first
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 of March. Unfortunately, I am unable to attend
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 prescheduled
interview
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 session as my wife is travelling to Canada next
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 and
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 these unavoidable circumstances, it is difficult for me to keep the appointment in the same
week
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.
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, I
am extremely apologised
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extremely apologise
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 for
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 unexpected situation and I would like to request you to change
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 prescheduled appointment.
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, the second
week
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 of March will be suitable for me to fix the
interview
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 session.
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, appreciate it if you let me know the duration of
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interview
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 session and please let me know if there is any test that I need to attend during the
interview
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. I hope you will consider my situation in a positive way and I look forward to hearing from you soon regarding
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Thomas Nicko

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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure in your letter to aid in coherence. Begin with an introduction, follow with a body that addresses each point of the task effectively, and conclude with a closing statement. Your letter has a good structure but could be further enhanced by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of the task for clearer progression of ideas.
task achievement
When addressing all parts of the task, ensure you directly answer all questions posed in the prompt. Your response did well in covering the required points, such as explaining your inability to attend the interview, apologising, requesting a new date, and enquiring about the interview details. For higher scores, make sure each of these elements is explicitly addressed and fully developed.
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