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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about this history of house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this ? How can people research this

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From the past decades, there have been many renovations of home building and construction for living in the society, and it is particularly related to the residents ‘ lifestyle. building or residences are not only shelters but represented the cultures, customs and memories of
people
 who used to stay there. Many cities in each part of the world are changing the city planning followed the increasing populations. Somehow
people
 could afford the
house
 or mansion, they might be curious more about the background of the land or the residences that they were leaving than only just staying for their beliefs and for prosperity in their lives. In China, they have the scope before building the residence that should be related to the location; the houses that had a river or canal in front of them or located in front of the mountains
,
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 claimed to be the best place with resident horoscope and would bring wealthiness and financial stability to the
house
 members. Or in some other Asian countries, It is forbidden to live in
house
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a house
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 which has a
history
 of murders or crimes , because
people
 who lived in those houses , might face bad luck and bad situations in the future.
Thus
, it depends on the resident's personal aspects and beliefs for selecting the houses. The way that they found out the
history
 of the
house
 might come from the ex-
house
 owner's storytelling or from their ancestor that they believe these sources and narrates from generation to generation.
However
, in
this
 decade,
people
 decided to own
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 that
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closed to their workplaces or was convenient to access public transport. And another factor that these generations have been concerned about was the smart city option and the friendly environment atmosphere. It is preferable to live in a city where there is no pollution in the air or water and provide good waste management. In conclusion, the
history
 of land or
house
 is not the main factor for selecting permanent residences but we should concern about the convenience and good environment that were surrounded each
house
. To find out the myth or
history
 of
house
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 or village might be not as important as the friendly surrounding to
ecosystem
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 in our community and
this
 world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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