Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

While
weapons
were more simple in the past, nowadays, they have become so complex,
such
as nuclear
weapons
. Many believe
this
technology provides numerous advantages worldwide,
although
I totally disagree with
this
statement. On the one hand, advocates of atomic
weapons
may claim that it would give privileges for having a safer world.
This
is because not all the countries across the globe seek peace, and actually, some of them strive for more power and war.
Therefore
, having
such
powerful
weapons
will bring a safer environment internationally to all people due to the fact that these
weapons
hold those countries to initiate war - countries like North Korea and Iran to name a few.
On the other hand
, many people believe that atomic defence equipment is harmful.
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of nuclear
weapons
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clearly known, which not only affects the environment but
also
it harms human health directly.
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equipment
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not any benefit to the world. An excellent example of these harms is Japan.
In addition
, these
weapons
are too dangerous to human existence as exploding only a few of them can lead to an irreversible disaster which might be
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of the planet. In my opinion, these cutting-edge facilities do not have any positive side to the world but only danger. In conclusion, as the primary reasons mentioned, despite the fact that many say nuclear bombs are helpful, these
weapons
are accompanied by a significant threat to all people and our planet, so manufacturing of them should be stopped
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