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In some countries, there have been schemes to encourage older professional people to retrain as school teachers. Do you feel that this is likely to have beneficial effects on education? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.

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When there is a shortage of school teachers, the government’s response is usually to encourage more graduates to enter the teaching
profession
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. Targeting older
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 who have spent their working life in a different
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 is a more radical attempt to deal with the problem. Some
people
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 might doubt whether it would work well. Teaching in a school can be a demanding activity requiring high levels of energy and so some
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 might find it difficult if previously they worked in a quiet office.
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, if their previous
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 involved working mainly with adults, they may have little understanding of young
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.
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, overall I feel that schemes like
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 are positive and more likely to be beneficial than
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. An older person who has worked in another
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 will probably have a greater experience of life outside school than someone who has gone into teaching straight from university. One of the criticisms sometimes made of education systems is that they do not make enough connections with the working life that pupils will enter. Older
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 will be better able to make these links and may help pupils to see the point of studying. It is true there may be a lack of understanding between teachers and pupils in some cases, but perhaps an initiative like
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 could be part of the solution to the wider problem. It might increase understanding on both sides through communication in the classroom. In general, I feel that an initiative like
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 is likely to be positive for education as long as the professional
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 in question are truly committed to it and prepared for the new demands that
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 career move will bring.
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