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It is unacceptable that people who work in certain professions,eg.finance,media, entertainment and sport,are paid such high salaries while others, who do more important jobs in society,are underpaid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are more and more
people
 who face to inequality and personal achievement in the relationship, while other
people
 believe that high levels of human being free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits.In my opinion, it is necessary to have equality in order to give all individuals equal possibilities to achieve their full potential and
this
 way they will be able to free succeed in
society
. Admittedly, the more and more others who have the experience of tertiary education in
society
.
such
 as: woman, retired
people
, if those
people
 gain rework throughout themselves work, which acquired appropriation from others,
thus
 they feel receive other’s valued.which is why they feel achievable in
society
.
Furthermore
, in whole
society
 ,
people
 means what of life meaningful that enables them to promote moral value.
Therefore
, all of humans being have to equality in
society
 where or which background come from country.
However
, it is not reality in the most countries in the word,
For example
, some countries in Africa, the government financial burden to a certain extent, including: agriculture, education, industrial, So there are many government priority the development agriculture, which neglect woman and children.But the downside should not be neglected.
That is
 mainly to say, the economically disadvantaged groups should be assured of an equal chance to access the university education or work opportunities by the government. Overall, if we have equality
society
 where all individuals have the same of opportunities for Achievements.The ideas that
people
 are free to aim for personal throughout their own best qualities will work
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