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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling if for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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It is true that the amount of household
waste
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 has not been recycled enough. Many people suggested that the best way to improve the recycling rate is that the government should introduce
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laws to make the civil sort the
waste
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 more responsibly. In my opinion,
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 can be a viable solution, but there are some better ways to deal with
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 very
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. On the one hand, enforcing the civil to recycle
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 could be a quick way to tackle
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problem
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. As if people do not adhere to the instructions, they might face
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some punishments, ranging from a fine to prison sentences if they
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 to
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, due to
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 very strict law, people can be more aware of what they have to do
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when it comes to
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 their household
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.
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, it cannot be possible to deal with a
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 via punishment without education. To be more specific, educating children and householders could help them realize how important it is to protect the environment by small sorting
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 activities in their daily life.
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 their future life and make it greener by separating the
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 properly. In conclusion, it is believed that making recycling become a legal requirement could be an effective way to solve
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, I strongly argued that
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 the legislation, we should focus on the impact of education on people’s awareness of recycling
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