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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In general, people
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 things differently, many people believe that the
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 should provide subsidies in public
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instead
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 of the
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 like the music and film industry because it is very extravagant. From my point of
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, I agree to a limited extent with
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 statement. In the following paragraphs, the cases and examples will help support my opinion. On the one hand, it can be seen that an increasing number of people encounter some serious social problems because they cannot access public
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 equally.
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, my grandparents, who live in a remote area were far from civilization, so they cannot totally receive social welfare from the
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,
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 as public health care.
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, due to the authority, the
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 should provide accessible
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 for their citizen, Especially, the elders who live in the countryside.
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, it is true to say that the governments should not develop only one aspect, but they must take serious action with other problems in their country,
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, in my country, Thailand, it is undeniable that the music industry is hardly sponsored by the
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.
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, it is not famous overseas. In my
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, it is significant for the
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 to take part in
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 issue and should pay more attention to looking after the
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. To sum up, I personally agree that
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 should not only spend their money on social
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, but they should
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 develop the
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 industry. The cases and examples mentioned above have supported my point of
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 to the best.
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  • expression of creativity
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  • boost tourism
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