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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

#people #internet #lives #cultures #countries #travel
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Nowadays, the
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 is very useful, almost everyone in the world uses the
internet
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, we can use the
internet
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 to search the place or learn about other country's cultures, but I disagree with
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 opinion because humans need to be active,
people
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 need to meet
people
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. There are two reasons that I do not agree with
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 opinion.
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 of all, I think it is not the same when we go to travel and just search on the
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 when you just search on the
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, you can just look at some pictures, even the picture is faint, and on the
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 not everything is true. On the
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 someone who posted the photo on the
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 will say, you must come here it is very beautiful…… which means it is definitely two different things going to the place and just looking at the photo on the
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, travelling, getting to know new places, meeting the culture of other country and getting to know new peoples is very important in our life.
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, meeting new places or new
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 can give more knowledge or experience, and it makes meaningful memories, and you can make many good friends when you go to new places and many delicious foods.
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, it is way better when you go outside than staying at home. In conclusion, I think travelling is necessary, and
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 always need to exercise.
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, I believe that travelling is way better than staying at home and just searching on the
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