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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role of education of children Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #school #children #homework #teachers #role #education
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A certain portion of parents
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 that
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 is important for
children
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, whereas other sets of people argue that it should not be provided. I believe
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 is essential for revising the concepts ,
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 it has to be given in moderate proportion.
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 in detail. On one hand, it aids teachers to evaluate if the student has understood the concept taught in the class.
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, portions that are not taught in the class shouldn't be given as
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 it should assist pupils to revise the concepts instructed in the
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.
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 will give an opportunity to clarify any doubts they had while doing their assignment. If the new syllabus is assigned as a home assignment,
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children
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 may not be able to complete it resulting in less self-confidence. As a consequence, there will be drop-outs from educational institutions, which might result in unemployment.
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, instructing
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 to perform home assignments reduces the
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 they have to socialize and learn new
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. After a long hectic day at
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,
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 assignments consume most of their
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 due to which they cannot work on their passion or hobby,
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, learning music or playing outdoor games
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 as basketball with friends. Nowadays, people who are multi-talented tend to get more opportunities,
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, Koneru Hampi, an international grandmaster is able to succeed in chess because her teachers and parents encouraged her to dedicate
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 for her passion. Sports not only increases fitness
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 but
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 teaches different
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 as team building, negotiation
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, interpersonal
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.
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,
children
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 will have ample amount of
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 to explore if there are no after
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 work. To conclude, I would argue that
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 should be a means for pupils to understand the concept rather than pushing them to learn new portions on their own,
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, they get adequate
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 to work on extra-curricular activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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