Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There is a trend that more and more colleges and universities adopt distance-learning programs recently. Especially some written materials, videos, televised and the Internet involved in

this

approach. My opinion is that studying online can not deliver as much academic effect as studying on

campus

. More failures

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the

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academic performance and lack of interesting

campus

life

can prove

this

point. As we all know, even some

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college or university

students

may choose to skip the course if they have

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much interest in it.

This

situation will be more often when the courses were given online.

For instance

students

' attention may be

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cached

catched

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by video games, lovely

pet

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, fantastic music etc. All of those factors may lead to

students

' poor performance in the examination that

further

might cause

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increasing level of

drop out

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rate.

Thus

distance-learning

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isn't as effective as attending school on

campus

On the other hand

, high school

students

need a large deal of interaction with their professors and classmates.

Also

, attending online courses at home can not be access to

falcilities

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facilities

campus

, the source of library, student recreation

center

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, student gym and some other essential things which can only be

accesseable

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accessible

at school. It is

obviously

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that youngsters can not enjoy that interesting

campus

life

just sitting in

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front of the computer.

Hence

, it is impossible for

distance-learning

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to replace studying on

campus

. In conclusion, most adolescents prefer to

attending

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class on

campus

than

taking

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the online course at home because they take

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priority to

campus

life

and

good

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academic performance.

Although

the online courses are necessary during the period of

epedimic

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epidemic

covid-19. Hopefully,

this

hard time will end soon and

students

can go back to

campus

to enjoy their interesting

campus

life

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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