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What are the main problems associated with using social media platforms ?

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Social media is the best platform to interact with friends and family, people suffer from many problems, but the main problem is
children
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 spending too much
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 on social media. To tackle
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 problem,
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 should take care of their
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. On social media, they are very addicted to
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. The main point is
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 do not give
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 to kids because of their busy schedules.
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 a very critical situation for
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 because
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 do not have a fear of
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, a boy spends too much
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 on games, and he loses his eyesight because of the high brightness of the phone and back problems increased. Some
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 are happy with their friends and family. Kids may be messaging or playing with their
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 while they should be studying or paying attention to their teachers.
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,
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 should spend some
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 playing other types of games or toys
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 as Lego or Playmobil, which
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 have educational value.
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 should take care of
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.
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,
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 should keep their
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 away from their
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 they spent
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 with heir and gave educational books to learn. In
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 situation,
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 have to stop the chides from using their
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. Now is the
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 for
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 to gain knowledge of everything rather than using
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 they can learn historical books and extend their knowledge. Give knowledge about their country and culture. In conclusion, the
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 should concentrate on
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's education they do not give
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 to
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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