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What are the main problems associated with using social media platforms ?

#media #platforms
Social media is the best platform to interact with friends and family, people suffer from many problems, but the main problem is
children
 spending too much
time
 on social media. To tackle
this
 problem,
parents
 should take care of their
children
. On social media, they are very addicted to
this
. The main point is
parents
 do not give
time
 to kids because of their busy schedules.
That is
 a very critical situation for
parents
 because
children
 do not have a fear of
parents
.
For example
, a boy spends too much
time
 on games, and he loses his eyesight because of the high brightness of the phone and back problems increased. Some
children
 are happy with their friends and family. Kids may be messaging or playing with their
phones
 while they should be studying or paying attention to their teachers.
Moreover
,
children
 should spend some
time
 playing other types of games or toys
such
 as Lego or Playmobil, which
also
 have educational value.
Parents
 should take care of
children
.
For example
,
parents
 should keep their
phones
 away from their
children
 they spent
time
 with heir and gave educational books to learn. In
this
 situation,
parents
 have to stop the chides from using their
phones
. Now is the
time
 for
children
 to gain knowledge of everything rather than using
phones
 they can learn historical books and extend their knowledge. Give knowledge about their country and culture. In conclusion, the
parents
 should concentrate on
children
's education they do not give
phones
 to
children
.
Submitted by sonysondh on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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