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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Over the decade, the
issues
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 pertaining to the environment have significantly gotten a lot of attention. The crust of the population is of the view that these
problems
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 should be dealt
uniformly
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with uniformly
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 across all countries.
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, some people believe it is relatively easier to resolve these inevitable
issues
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 nationally. In my opinion, all the countries are not financially stable so it is better to tackle
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problems
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 globally. On the one hand, the most salient benefit of dealing with environmental
issues
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 on a larger scale is that it gets resolved swiftly. To support
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 clause, the epidemic
Ebola
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of Ebola
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 that spread in Liberia in 2013/2014 could have been controlled much earlier if the World Health Organization would have given the power.
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, some
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 like Global Warming, the use of Fossil fuels require a much larger audience. It is estimated that if we continue using Fossil fuels at the same rate as we are doing, it will be depleted by 2060.
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, the world collectively needs to implement several measures.
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, dealing with
problems
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 like air pollution or water pollution,
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apply
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becomes easier to resolve in a specific place rather than looking at a bigger picture.
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, designating an appropriate place to set up factories so that it doesn't pollute the city, is a problem for the local authority.
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, on solving
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 nationally, countries become debt-free and independent of their own choices. Since it requires exorbitant money in bringing global attention to
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the deal
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. To conclude, the opinion of people differ on whether environmental
problems
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 should be solved on a global scale or national scale, I believe that both levels of solutions significantly depend on the nature of the problem and the need for answers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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